Old Paper But Better

This time I think I will be able to get my point across more clearly because in the rhetorical analysis, we avoided or at least regulated how much of our own input we included. My last paper was lacking in transitions and I think this time I will be able to work on them with a better knowledge of what good transitions are. One thing I also want to improve on this paper is my word choice, I'm going to really apply Anne's idea of trying no to use the same word or phrase to start a sentence more than once.