new titles

Gay Rights

Rights for Homosexuals

titles

1. sone
2. soshified
3. fanfare

Credit Card Protection Reform Analysis Titles

Crash or Credit?
Credit Card Decline
Limits on Protection

Doba vs. Chipotle

More Than You're Everyday Burrito
It's All In The Queso
Funky Fresh Burrito

Title

1. It's only Rock n' Roll, but I like it
2. Rok-un-Rohl
3. Rock and Roll: Undefinable

Three possible titles: Definition argument on the word pain

"Does It Hurt?"

"Pain Is Pain"

"Ouch! Why?"

New names?

Definition Argument of Freedom titles......
1) Analyzing Freedom
2) Freedom Writer
3)Complexity of Freedom

Titles for my paper

1) The meaning of heart
2) The many possibilities of heart
3) Quality of character and heart

New Titles

Rhetorical Analysis Titles on College

1. College: Is it necessary?
2. Higher Education Opinions
3. Who Needs College Anyhow?

This Is The Title

Original title: The Intrinsic Question

1. Innate Spirit

2. Concept of the Divine

3. Goddess Orgy Party

Titles

1.) What defines freedom?
2.) Is freedom actions or thoughts?
3.) Thought defines freedom.

• The Strengths and Weaknesses of "Razing Arizona"
• Is "Razing Arizona" a Successful Argument?
• The Success of "Razing Arizona"

Titles

Beauty: Only Skin Deep?
Beauty and the Beast
Looking in the Mirror: An analysis of Beauty

Titles, Titles, and More Titles....

America's Mistake
Isn't One Oil Spill Enough?
Are We That Greedy?

Fixing the unfascinating :|

The Limitation of Words

"Family" Arguments

Definition Wars

New Titles

-The Power of Hope
-Having Hope can Change a Life
-Hope, the Driving Force

what needs work?

I would have to say my rhetorical analysis needs the most revision. I summarized more than I needed to and did not put enough emphasis on the analytical part. I will utilize the english writing center to improve my writing.

Revising paper

     I think the paper I am going to revise is the definition arguement. Even though I got a better grade on this paper I felt like it needed more work. It could have had more of a flow to it. The paper (to me) was kind of choppy and didn't make sense through out certain parts of the paper. Through revision I can make the definition paper more interesting and make the learner feel like they read it for a reason instead of feeling like I wasted their time.
    To revise my paper I was thinking about reorganizing the structure and making better transitions. To make the flow more continous. I hope that will make it a lot better.

so..which sucks the most?

I would say my ART research definition paper needs a lot of work because i jump around with what it is i define it as and just cus the word was nearly impossible to define anyway.
I could probably make the Pit Bulls one the best because i enjoy researching the topic of misunderstood pitbulls and i also think it was one of my better papers.
Hmmm...I would go about revising my paper just by revising it the good old fashioned way by reading it aloud and making changes i feel fit.  I would definaetely go back and use the sheet with un-necessary or in-effective words and take those out of my paper...specifically.

Portfolio

Between the first two papers, my rhetorical analysis paper need the most work due to the fact that I seemed to ramble and not make my point clear. Through significant revision I can make my definition argument the best, because I have a lot of facts and points that I didn't make that would make the paper better. To revise this paper I would go over the techniques and tricks on the Purdue Owl and have people, with no connection to me, go over the paper.

definition paper need more work

I believe that this paper need the most work because it was a paper I was sure of that I would receive a good grade on, but the fact was that I do not seem to combine the paragraph to good and the readers seem to loose what I'm writing about. About revising my paper I would have more of my peers to read the essay and give me feedback so I can see what I need work on and learn to be able to write a good essay.

Rhetorical Analysis

My rhetorical analysis needs most work because I used too much first person , too much repetition, and needs to be more concise. This assignment I can make the best significant revision because I have a better feel on what an rhetorical analysis is and how to write one. Going about this revising I'd reread my paper, your comments and perhaps look for another article to analyze. These techniques would work because then I'd know what to fix and how to fix it.

Portfolio!

My rhetorical anaylsis needs the most work by FAR!! I didn't do well on it becasue I had too much summary and not enough analysis! I know I can improve this essay the most. Through the last three papers I have learned how to analyze the work and go in depth. The best way I can revise my paper is to ask why? I need to go back and hilight all of the summary and take most of it out. With the support I give, I need to ask questions, how? why? Things like that. I also need to work on punctuation. The grammar from my first paper was pretty bad so I need to go back and revise that. I know what a comma splice is so that will be the first order of business. Well....that's about it....

Portfolio

My definition argument needs the most work because my claim needs to be reworked.I will also need to work on the formality and variation of my diction. I can make the best revision with this paper because it is the best opportunity for me to edit my writing style and learn from my mistakes. I will address your comments on my formality and my claim, but I will also try to revise my content to make it more content specific. The most important thing I need to do is make a clear claim early in my paper. I plan on going back through my paper and culling out useless information and trying to find sources that will help to strengthen my revised claim.

I think that my rhetorical analysis needs more work because it was one of the first papers and I think that my writing skills have improoved since then. However, my definition argument is the paper that might need the most revision. This is because i am trying to make a clear point and in doing so I need my paper to be understandable. To revise, I will proof read and plug in any additional information or research to support my claim.

Portfolio

I think my definition argument needs the most work because there is more revising and changing that needs to be done but I also feel like I can make it the best though revision. I feel like i can make it the best because I know what I need to do and revise to make it better. I would go about revising my paper by making my thesis more clear and my argument more refined. These revisions would help my paper by making it clear and concise and easy to understand what my argument is but also what the other side of the arugument is as well. Also it will show why my argument is better than the other more clearly

editing

My definition argument needs more work because I got a worse grade on it. I believe that I can improve my definition argument more because a large portion of the essay was off topic. I can fix this by removing the unneeded parts and adding in more analysis.

Portfolio

My rhetorical analysis needs the most work because I feel that it can be drastically improved. It is too repetitive, informal, and my arguments can be explained more in detail. I will also need to put more counterarguments within the paper as this seems to be one of my greatest issues. For revising my paper, I am planning on going to the writing center and having more of my peers revise it. Having others revise my paper will be useful because they will give me more feedback on what should be changed.

making everything better.....!

My rhetorical analysis paper is the one that needs the most work. My honest reason was that it was my first college paper and I had no idea what to expect. I didnt try as hard as I could have and I did not do as well as i would have hoped. I can make the definition argument the best because it is a sort of opinionized paper. I feel like it is a stronger paper and I would be able to make it better through my revisions. Specific techniques that i would use would be to print it out and revise my sentence structure and word structure and see it on paper and proofread it. yeah.....WOO!

Decisions...decisions....

The paper that needs the most work on revisions is my Rhetorical Analysis paper because I apparently suck at writing and in depth analysis of whatever I'm talking about. I need to thoroughly explain why or why not the topic/author was engaging the audience, I also need to list more examples that go along with the analysis. To make the ULTIMATE CHOICE....hmmm this is a tough decision....I would probably challenge myself with revising my Rhetorical Analysis because I want to challenge myself on a subject of paper I am not really strong in. GRAMMAR!!!!!!!! I NEED TO WORK ON PUNCTUATION!!!!!! And, and....um......I still have to figure out what other SPECIFIC revisions I have to incorporate into my new Rhetorical Analysis :)

Revision for Portfolio

I think that my rhetorical analysis paper needs the most work. The reason that I think it needs more work than my definition argument is because I put less time into, but also because I had not writen a paper in a while. Another reason that I think this paper needs more work than my definition paper is because I had never written a paper for college and did not know what was expected and what was different than the papers I had written for highschool. However I think that I could make my defintion paper the best with significant revision because it was already pretty good, but with some major changes it could be alot better. In order to revise my paper I think i will go back and make sure that every sentence is good and can stand on its own as well as making sure that it all flows together to make a strong paper.

house party

I have chosen to revise my definition argument. There are some major parts of the paper that I plan to change, such as add another source, strengthen the thesis and reorganize. I will reassess the structure of my paper and make my definition clearer and less redundant in language.

Portfolio!

I think the paper that needs the most work is my definition analysis, I thought that I did a really good job revising, however, it came to my attention that I lost sight of all the bigger things that needed to be done. For example, I used first person in my paper, big NO-NO! I think that I can make the best revision on this paper because I was really into it and had strong feelings about what I was writing. Besides incorporating your comments, which I will do for sure, I will go back to the writing center and make sure that all the grammar and punctuation is perfect, as well as making sure I cover what I am supposed to, instead of writing about what I want to.

Final Project

The definition argument needs the most work. It was the paper that I got the worst grade on and I know I can do better. Aside from suggestions already made, I can make my argument stronger instead of the paper sounding like I'm just giving multiple examples. Examples are great but elaborating more on just a few of them would make it better.

Anne, did you dye your hair darker? 11/11/10

It looks darker than it did

Likes/dislikes

I liked the freedom we had. We got to choose any problem with any solution. The satirical element made this more entertaining and interesting for some.

Workshop!? More like Sweatshop...

The most recent peer workshop, when we looked at every one's creative medium for their proposal, went fairly well. I got a lot of good feedback on what I should maybe change or what people thought were the strong points of my video. The only thing I didn't like, is when someone didn't get the irony of the video and thought it was too serious, not only did this happen a couple times, but these people didn't even give advise on what I should change to make it more obvious to them.

i got the coffee...

i got the coffee.

What i like about this assignment

I liked this assignment because it was different but I didn't really like the workshops. They did not seem as helpful as they usually are and it was hard to figure out what the general assignment was at first. The proposal assignment was interesting because it was different and fun, but I think that it would have been better if there was more in depth workshops or a personal meeting with you. I like everyone's videos and what not but I felt my creative side needed a little work so maybe that's why I did not like this assignment as much. Overall it was still a good assignment and I enjoyed doing it.

I have enjoyed working on this assignment because I like how it has a creative part to it. I also like how we have options for both the writing and creative parts. This is better than just having to write an essay like how we've been doing our whole lives. I have also liked the workshops a lot because they have been very helpful. There really isn't anything I would change about this assignment because it is quite simple and straightforward.

woo! project?

I like the creative aspect of this project and that it is somewhat personal! It was more interesting to be able to write on a world problem and what I thought would help. the workshops did help so that i could get ideas from the people around me to help me get an A!

creative log- smreative log

I liked having the opportunity to write a formal proposal and do a creative piece with it as well, but having to write a creative log seems almost redundant. . . If the creative piece does not do a good job of representing my problem or solution than it should be a lower grade. . . having justification for it doesn't really make the creative piece and better or worse. . .

check out my blog.... i guess.... ......at i think     http://www.thereturn1020.blogger.com/ .  what isn't clear? is it good bad? 

I like how relaxed the style of this workshop was. I also like having the chance for fellow students to evaluate eachothers papers and art. This also gave me the chance to make some touch ups on anything that needed it.

like, didn't like , and woudl change about it

I liked that we had more time on this assignment and that I was able to get help from the libarian. I also liked the workshop we had where we posted comments on everyone's work, that was very helpful. There wasn't anything I didn't like and I wouldn't change anything about this assignment.

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What I liked about this assignment was being able to chose our own problems, and then make up any kind of solution to it that we wanted. Not having to research nearly as much as the other paper was also very nice. I can't think of any real problems with this project at the moment.

Sean forgot his Password

I liked this project because I got to make my own documentary! I don't like the peer reviews that much because we aren't sure what we are exactly looking for. I like the paper in general because it was less strict and more creative! Hooray. that is all

Problem/Solution

The workshops helped me to focus my argument on my audiences. The input I received allowed me to change my solutions to be more concise and effective. Overall this assignment has been fairly easy to complete. Being able to chose our own topic and come up with our own solutions made this a fun assignment.

In comparison to..

I liked this workshop way better then all of the rest of them, it was way more open and we all knew better what we were supposed to be doing. The project as a whole I enjoyed wayyy more! It was more creative and that I liked for sure. It was also nice to be able to write this paper on what we wanted to, for me this is helpful in writing anything. If I have a strong emotion about my paper I always seem to do better then if not. It was also nice to know how my paper is going to be graded. I felt like I actually know what the criteria was and I was able to write to it!

I thought that the workshop was kinda helpful but not that much. We didnt really get to talk about peoples comments and there were no guidlines on how respectful people should be. It should be just common sense to be respectful of peoples work but I saw some disrepectful comments. I think next time it should be more organized and the comments should be helpful and respectful. I did think having peers look at eachothers work is helpful though.

house party

The assignment was slightly difficult beacsue I have never done something like it before. However, I had fun with it and my peers helped a lot during the workshops.

Current Assignment

There were things that I liked and disliked about the proposal assignment. One of the things that I really liked was the workshops that we did. I liked that they were more informal and that more people got a chance to look at it and give you feedback. One of the problems with this is that not all the feedback was helpful, some just commented on the looks rather than the content and how effective that was. I also liked how open this assignment was. It gave us more freedom to be creative. The only drawback to this was that it is hard to judge whether we are meeting what you are looking for or not. The main thing that I disliked is that we had to do so many if we choose the brochure or poster choice. I think that 3 posters is ok but if we were doing a brochure we should have only had to do 2 options such as 2 brochures or a poster and a brochure, because they did take a lot of time to create a good brochure with lots of data and information. Overall I would say that I liked this assignment more than the other two we have done because it was more creative, and less structured.

I don't know what to title this....

I liked this style of workshops because it was more engaging and it was interesting to go around the room and look at other people's creative proposals. This writing style was also intriguing because it allowed me to use both my logic and reason, and also my satirical humor. All around, I liked this assignment--it was fun :)

Proposal Feedback

Overall, I enjoyed the assignment. I really liked doing the creative portion of the assignment and I also liked the written part because of the amount of options we had. The workshop was fun and it helped! I liked this assignment all together.

Proposal

I'm going to write my paper as an editorial as to target a wide audience of teens adults and old people. I am going to propose than none of these groups get the flu shot for different reasons: for teens - no homework, for adults- no work, and for old people - its better to die now from the flu than later from something else. It is important to gear my proposal to these audiences because they are the only ones who would be able to read the newspaper and also because they are old enough to get the flu shots. The more people I am able to influence, the

Audience

My audience of the letter I am writing for my written proposal is to the government officials that deal with the nation's problems. I am writing a direct and formal letter in order to express my views and the hazards of global warming. My creative portion of the proposal is to create a website which implements posters as well as pictures and very valuable information.

I would say conservatives.

I think that the audience I'm directing this proposal to would be conservative because in the article I'm reading violates one of the amendments of the constitution and these people would really freak out to know that the right to bear arms would be taken away. I would, how would we protect ourselves from any robbery or burglary? One way I wanted to draw attention was by using the United States flag as a way to show patriotism and try to grab the reader’s attention. I want to know what people would think if this happened to them. Please visit my blog to read this article and give a response.. Thank YOU!!!!! 

www.low-debt-no-2nd-amendment-right.blogspot.com

A Nationwide March Proposal

My topic is obesity and the "Nationwide March" is directed towards curing obesity.  My audience would therefor be anyone and everyone "overweight".  Although, my proposal is somewhat satirical and if there were to be a nationwide walk/run for the morbidly obese than everyone, not just people overweight, would be affected and therefor be my audience as well.  But mainly...this will be directed toward people with weight issues and guiding them into better health.  My essay is formal. 

My proposal

For my proposal I wrote a letter. It is mostly geared to animal lover but I specifically wrote the letter to Ingrid Newkrik, the President of PETA. For the creative side of my proposal I am going to use a poster/brochure. I think this will be most effective when introducing my problem and solution. I do not use pathos like I thought I would but i figure since this is my rough draft I can include more things that I want to . Since my audience is PETA and animal lovers I think it is important to call on them because they are the only ones with power to do something about endangered animals.

Audience

My audience of this proposal would be anyone of concern, particularly America or the people in America who litter often. I plan to get through to them by directly mentioning that Americia has a problem and we need a solution. I believe that it is important to gear your proposal toward an audience because otherwise, it will not hold an interest to the people.

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My audience is anyone who lives on this world who wishes to keep it clean insofar as possible.

The most important way I will reach this audience will be by showing them the devasting pollution that is caused by both the production of these plastic water bottles, and the pollution they themselves cause when they are not recycled. I will provide various statistical datas to this purpose, possibly pictures of animals hurt by these pollutions, and especially in my diorama, the benefits that will occur in the elimination of these plastic water bottles.

I believe it is important to direct my proposal to this audience because they are the ones who will actually care about the pollution being caused by these water bottles, rather than just turn a blind eye to these problems and say, "its all in the name of progress". While some problems may necessarily arise due to progress, there is an obvious amount of these problems that can be solved, and should be solved.

For my writing proposal, my audience is the President of Mexico. I am writing a letter to him because if there is to be an end to all the violence in Mexico, then he is the person who can make these changes happen. He is the person who declared war on drugs and he has been managing this war, so he is the person who can make the government stop interfering with the drug cartels and he also has the power to legalize drugs in that country.
My creative proposal will be geared towards three different audiences since I will be making three brochures. One brochure will be geared towards Mexico's government, the second one towards the drug cartels, and the third brochure will be geared towards the civilians of Mexico. These audiences are important to my particular proposal because they are the groups of people who are the most affected by all of the violence that has been going on.

Pretty Proposal

My audience is the president of Zimbabwe. I'm gearing my proposal by telling him why the one-child policy works and I have given him many statistics and facts. I think it important to gear my proposal in a persuading and convincing way so that the president understands that starvation is very severe and deadly. He then will consider the policy and learn that with less born into this world less will suffer from starvation and malnutrition.

youth

My audience is the younger generation of America.

I plan to appeal to them by adding humor into my argument. I will start by providing a satirical solution and then state how serious the issue is.

I targeted the younger generation of America because they are not very interested in foreign politics. Also, this issue may effect the future of America so it will affect the younger generations more.

Audience

For my formal assignment I decided to write to Aurora City Councilman Broom. Councilman Broom represents the ward that I live in and the area where my problem is located. By detailing the problem and offering him possible solutions I hope to emphasize the severity of the problem and the relative ease of fixing it. When writing to Broom I must use a formal tone and ensure that I get straight to the point.

For my creative assignment I plan on making a brochure and poster. The audience for the brochure and poster are everyday people that live in the area. Instead of bogging down the audience with the same details I would give to the councilman, I plan on using the more effective points in my argument. I will focus on the fact there is little taxpayer cost involved to implement the programs, as well as focusing on the risks of reckless bike riding. I hope that these facts will get the taxpayers behind the programs. By seeing that the public is behind the programs the government will see that it would be in their best interest to support the programs.

Audience

My audience consists of almost everyone, but is directed mainly towards people who travel to work, like business men or school students. I'm aiming my proposal towards them mainly through the brochures I'm making, one for each specific audience (one for buisness people, one for students). I think these types of people are best suited for my audience because they constantly travel and more likely are late every once in a while, so they best fit my proposal.

PEERS

My audience is the slacking people of the world. I went to the procrastinators and the people who don't care about hard work or schedules. The specific ways are that I list the schedules and that it will pick up the effiency of the entire world! I explain that people will work harder if there is a reward to get the audience to agree with me. My creative assignment shows the importance of the rewarding behavior and how it will change everybody's efficiency! It is particularly important because I want to show that procrastinating is not the good way to go, but hard work and to set a schedule for yourself brings up the efficiency of the world.

Renewable Energy Centre

My audience is the Renewable Energy Centre. I am writing a formal proposal as this would be the most effective way to reach my audience and appear credible. It is important to gear my proposal to this audience because they are responsible for much of our handling of renewable resources and they must approve this porcedure before it can be submitted for government approval.

Hello?

Hmmm....The young female and male generation that are victimized constantly in their lifetime would be the targeted audience for the editorial and creative piece I am putting together. The editorial that I am preparing is geared towards the general public that needs to be taught how to take down a stalker. The creative piece will demonstrate the steps that my solution is presenting. I think it is important for my particular proposal to be geared towards the young men and women in the general public, it allows them to understand that their are other solutions out there to deal with the stalking issue worldwide.

hold your applause, please. seriously, stop clapping.

My proposal is geared toward anyone who is feeling the hurt in our current economy, so the general public. The reason my proposal is aimed at this particular audience is because most working class Americans are desperate and will do anything it takes to save their money. Anything.

Audience

My audience is the leaders of each country. The letter is written as if it were going to be read by the world leaders, it addresses them personally in it. It's written in a formal way so it sounds legit and the leaders will take it seriously. In the video it says ATTENTION WORLD LEADERS. I don't know if I could make it any clearer.....
My audience is important because my plan requires their help. Addressing it to anybody else would not make sense.
That's about it...

Audience for Letter

For my letter the direct audience is the president, however the overall audience is the general public, specifically people wanting to get married. I am gearing my proposal to this audience by making the changes effect that specific group of people. For the written part I wrote to the president because if he see something as needing to change it has a better chance of getting passed. This will in turn effect the general public. For the creative part my proposal will be more toward the general public because it will be in there direct sight and given to them. My proposal is for this audience because they will be the ones effected if the changes takes place.

The audience for my paper is the Chancellor at the University of Colorado Denver. I chose to write a letter to him, because he is really the only person that can make changes like I am proposing. I wrote the letter as a student, and how that the lack of an athletic fee affects us. The letter is geared totally to the Chancellor, however, the creative side of the proposal will be geared to the students at the school. It is important to make the students realize what the benefits of paying the optional fee will be.

Audience

My audience is to the President of the United States. My proposal will be in a professional format which addresses the economic problems our President must face. My creative aspect of my proposal will be three short poems. It its important to aim at this particular audience due to the potential impact it might have.

its all about the audience!

my audience is people that dont know much about internet fraud and the companies whose names are used in creating fraud. specific ways that i'm gearing my proposal to them is i'm making a brochure for the people and i'm writing a letter to the companies. i think its important to gear this to this particular sudience because i feel like i would get the most attention from these two particular audiences