what worked and what didn't

I have noticed that from last semesters writing to this new one, that my writing hasnt really improved very much. I still struggle to keep organization in my writing and when i feel like i do have it organized it isn't very much improvement. I guess i can say that i do not feel very confident with my writing and not comfortable at all. I try letting other read my writing so that tthey can grade in on their skills but that still leaves me feeling bad about my writings. I'm not expecting a really good peace to come out of me but to become a writer that feels good about his work. I was able to analyse my genre i chose very well. I knew what ways beer conpanies used in order to manipulate viewers and some of those ways was throughtout humor and women in their commercials. Viewing my creative ads i believe i was able to recreate an ad that would use humor but instead for the beer i used it against the beer and i dont know if that can be really easy to do or a little difficult. Over all I finished the essay but like always I'm unsatified with my essay because either thats who I'm or it is obviouse my work sucks and need pro. help.. :)

another example of a beer ad

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Here is another ad that like all other beer ads. This tries to grab the viewers atention by using a model in their beer ad in order to sell their product. One thing that I noticed was that I really didnt pay attention to were the words a the bottom because for a few seconds I was focused on the girl and the guitar she was playing IN THE WATER! was is that, just another stupid beer ad. Most ads dont make sense but they do it in order for viewers to think of that ad and how studpid it was, but hey your still thinking of their product. Another thing that i also noticed on the ad was the pair of wing they use on the "dean" i believe as in a way to show freedom.. perhaps freedom of stress or anythinng that troubles viewers to think that dean is a way to release stress. The time its taking place is sundown which is of course time when most people start to drink head out to bars and clubs. This in a way may look like a dumb ad but perhaps it was a well thought out one.

writing my draft/essay

the way i write my draft paper is by usually jumping in it and going with the flow. I usualy end up with a really sucky paper and i have to re-write most paragraphs. So what i would like to do this time is actually think out the process of writitng the paper. i know last semester i talked about using an outline, that would really help me out so i could have a flow throught my transitions between each paragraph and people can better understand what my essay is about.  When writing my essay i would like to let other people read it and give feed back that way i can get an understanding of what is clear and what isn't and also what i need work on. I dont expect this essay to be the  best one ive written so far but i do hope to improve my writing skills to becoming a good writer.

Genre

The genre i chose was one that in a way just came to my mind but it was also a genre that worked in the same way as the cereal box, alcohol commercials direct their commericials to young audiences because it would be an age group that alcohol companies profit off the most from. The type of commercials they show the viewers are a group of friends having fun at a pool party or at a bar surrounded by atractive women enjoying the sunday night football game. The way i came to choose my samples was by thinking of ways buisness or the gov. used inner feelings intended to make the viewer feel for that product or event. Another example would be the US gov. recruiting for the military. One way the gov. was enlisting people in  WWII was by using posters to reach peoples feelings. They would have a man with a tuxedo staring down, while on the outside, you can see throught the window friends or soldiers marching by, and then at the bottom of the page you would read.. On which side of the window are YOU!?
One way i could combine both genres is how the military and alcohol both kill young adults..and ask a question should the legal drinking age limit go down? because people can vote for a president kill for their president at age 18 but they cant drink at age 18. They both use imagry to catch the viewers inner fellings of FUN, DUTY, WOMEN, GUNS, in order for them to but the product and enlist.