Revisions

To revise my definition argument paper, I tried to improve the analysis of it. This was a problem in my rhetorical analysis paper, so I decided to improve it in this paper. I did this by explaining some of my ideas more in-depth because some of them were vague. I also added another source to my paper, as it was recommended to me on Thursday during the workshop. All of the feedback that I received from having people revise my paper was also useful and I tried to incorporate most of their suggestions withing my paper. For the final draft of my paper, I hope to eliminate most of the grammatical errors that it may have so that my paper is as best as I can make it.