Revising

I really have to do well on this paper. As far as revising goes I will go back through and ask why in all my arguments since in my last paper it was a problem. I will go back and check all the punctuation because that was also a problem. I will read it aloud and make sure the sentence structure and organization is ok, which I did not do last time. The other main thing I will do is have someone not in this english class look at and try to tell me what the purpose of the paper is and see if they can pick out my thesis and arguments. I took into account the changes that needed to be made from the first peer edit and I will do this process again with the second peer revising. I also need to go back and look at the first paper and look at everything I did wrong and try to not make that happen in my second paper. Hopefully it will be better.