Revising my paper

    I think that a really good portion of my paper is going to have to be revised. My best guess would be 40%. My strategy on making my paper better is going to be breaking down each paragraph and rewording each sentence so they each contribute to the paper as a whole. I feel like I have a lot of fluff in each paragraph that doesn't need to be there. I am also going to work on my organization because that seems to be one of my bigger weaknesses. To improve my grade i am going to try to make my writing more interesting so the reader doesn't not have to zone in and out of the essay. I feel if I just changed minor things then my essay would be significantly better then my previous work. I will try to vary my sentences in length and choice of diction so it is not so repetitive. Hopefully this works out better then my last essay.