Rhetorical Analysis

My rhetorical analysis needs most work because I used too much first person , too much repetition, and needs to be more concise. This assignment I can make the best significant revision because I have a better feel on what an rhetorical analysis is and how to write one. Going about this revising I'd reread my paper, your comments and perhaps look for another article to analyze. These techniques would work because then I'd know what to fix and how to fix it.