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My definition argument needs the most work because my claim needs to be reworked.I will also need to work on the formality and variation of my diction. I can make the best revision with this paper because it is the best opportunity for me to edit my writing style and learn from my mistakes. I will address your comments on my formality and my claim, but I will also try to revise my content to make it more content specific. The most important thing I need to do is make a clear claim early in my paper. I plan on going back through my paper and culling out useless information and trying to find sources that will help to strengthen my revised claim.