definition paper need more work

I believe that this paper need the most work because it was a paper I was sure of that I would receive a good grade on, but the fact was that I do not seem to combine the paragraph to good and the readers seem to loose what I'm writing about. About revising my paper I would have more of my peers to read the essay and give me feedback so I can see what I need work on and learn to be able to write a good essay.