Can i use these comments?

     Of course I can use these comments. For my revision assignment I am definitely going to take your advice and count all the words in my sentences and try to vary the length instead of everything being so repetitive. I am going to read each sentence out loud and see if everything flows continuously. For example, I am going to first add more to my paper then read out loud, then check if everything sounds right. Hopefully this technique will improve my paper and give me an A+++++++.